tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6498899580300269250.post3521627318874341204..comments2023-04-04T09:15:46.871-05:00Comments on Shapeshifter Seductions: Ride the Roan Stud ~ First Chapter of Manuscript Serena Shayhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/17959664736807639363noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6498899580300269250.post-27057711894103832332014-08-21T14:07:48.962-05:002014-08-21T14:07:48.962-05:00Thanks, Pat. Proofreader is always good! Thanks, Pat. Proofreader is always good! Savanna Kougarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15698138048388102279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6498899580300269250.post-29123918166904709722014-08-21T12:14:37.589-05:002014-08-21T12:14:37.589-05:00This is why I don't read for content. If you n...This is why I don't read for content. If you need a proofreader, however, I'm your gal.Pat C.https://www.blogger.com/profile/10531462055912377327noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6498899580300269250.post-59592659941576759532014-08-20T13:51:24.754-05:002014-08-20T13:51:24.754-05:00Thanks for your feedback, Pat and Rebecca. Thanks for your feedback, Pat and Rebecca. Savanna Kougarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15698138048388102279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6498899580300269250.post-29018050763203899692014-08-20T12:10:11.146-05:002014-08-20T12:10:11.146-05:00I didn't think it was info dump-ish. It was ju...I didn't think it was info dump-ish. It was just a couple paragraphs that gave some background. I find it easier to relate to a character if I have some idea of where they came from, so to speak, or basically, I like to be ginen a reason for why I should care if the character exists at all. Now 15 pages of background right at the beginning of a book is an info dump, but this was just the right amount.Rebecca Gillanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01341836304924085727noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6498899580300269250.post-88474952167404378332014-08-20T10:28:37.955-05:002014-08-20T10:28:37.955-05:00Thanks, Pat. I'll have to think about that and...Thanks, Pat. I'll have to think about that and how the story flows, since the way it plays out isn't really conducive to that kind of conversation early enough -- given Ghost Walker's condition, and how he's rescued. Savanna Kougarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15698138048388102279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6498899580300269250.post-88174206508265325542014-08-20T10:01:30.108-05:002014-08-20T10:01:30.108-05:00There's a bit of an info dump in there regardi...There's a bit of an info dump in there regarding his childhood and adoptive tribe. Any way that could be postponed to a later chapter, so we can focus on Ghost and his situation (and hook the reader with a mystery/action scene)?<br /><br />For example, somebody asks what he's doing out there and he says, "Hiking," and thinks about his background and why he needs to protect the shamans from discovery. Or he can dole out some truth to the love interest later on, as a show of trust.<br /><br />If this is the one going to Siren, don't worry about the freebie. On the cover questionaire I revealed a version of "Jessalina's Pets" chapter 2 appeared as a free read. They never said squat about it. If this is all you're posting, you should be okay.<br /><br />I'm also thinking about a pen name if I ever write another standard MF story. I should have changed names when I switched to MM. Too late now, but I can start fresh with other subgenres.Pat C.https://www.blogger.com/profile/10531462055912377327noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6498899580300269250.post-40773305240105375732014-08-19T19:57:23.735-05:002014-08-19T19:57:23.735-05:00Serena, yeah, it is. I finally finished.
Thanks,...Serena, yeah, it is. I finally finished. <br /><br />Thanks, Rebecca and Serena. Once I polish as best as I'm able, I'll send the story, if you're still interested in reading through it, and giving feedback. Savanna Kougarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15698138048388102279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6498899580300269250.post-62171847420787071362014-08-19T19:26:30.772-05:002014-08-19T19:26:30.772-05:00Ooh, looks interesting! If this is the one I thin...Ooh, looks interesting! If this is the one I think it is, I can sure take a peek at those awkward parts if you'd like. :) Serena Shayhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/17959664736807639363noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6498899580300269250.post-77026489140743403442014-08-19T18:20:33.917-05:002014-08-19T18:20:33.917-05:00In that case, I volunteer to be a beta reader if y...In that case, I volunteer to be a beta reader if you need one. ;) You've got my curiosity running with what happened to Ghost's spirit path!Rebecca Gillanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01341836304924085727noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6498899580300269250.post-16736091755599457582014-08-19T18:03:04.338-05:002014-08-19T18:03:04.338-05:00Probably not, since I'm going to submit it onc...Probably not, since I'm going to submit it once the mss is polished. And you can't have much publicly posted. Savanna Kougarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15698138048388102279noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6498899580300269250.post-51151442403948646402014-08-19T17:55:51.261-05:002014-08-19T17:55:51.261-05:00Damn, that's really quite interesting! We are ...Damn, that's really quite interesting! We are going to get more, right?Rebecca Gillanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01341836304924085727noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6498899580300269250.post-30576132708805085442014-08-19T16:25:40.395-05:002014-08-19T16:25:40.395-05:00Darn! I already see mistakes, and corrections to b...Darn! I already see mistakes, and corrections to be made. Savanna Kougarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15698138048388102279noreply@blogger.com